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Cardinals will
                drip
from the branches like
berries
and the sky will turn to smoke.
The ground crunches under your feet and it’s
Almost as if you could
         sail away
across the ice.
Brandished behind screens of glass
are fists of ivory
They are covered in scratches and
         bloom
from the dark like magnolia blossoms.
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Oh, wow! I should really check my DA more often...A Daily Deviation! I never, ever, saw that coming! Thanks, everyone, for all of the kind comments, I'm sorry it's taken me so long to check my account. Also, thank you to :iconoleem: for suggesting the poem for a DD!

Thank you so much to :iconoleem: for featuring this poem! :heart:
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Given 2010-12-13
My Winter by ~Mjulinir brings winter to life with brilliant imagery and elegant verse. ( Suggested by ~Oleem and Featured by `nycterent )
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~Mordial33 Nov 22, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. That was amazing. You put yourself out on a limb and wrote of beauty as if in a dream. (Check out some of my poems. I am new.)
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:iconmjulinir:
Thank you! I will check them out when I get the chance!
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:iconichors:
Very pretty, the imagery in crisp. I see what you've done with the enjambement, almost using it as punctuation. None the less, I feel some punctuation would complement the piece quite well, the poem seems a little rushed without it. I feel the imagery gets a little rushed, it needs more time to be digested.
Congratulations on the DD, and well written. :beer:
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:iconmjulinir:
Thanks, very much! I'm really a novice when it comes to poetry, so the feedback is definitely appreciated! I can see what you mean about the poem needing something to slow it down a little.
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:iconsarah-the-writer:
Beautiful! Love the flow of this piece, and the imagery. Great work!
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:iconmjulinir:
Thank you very much!
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~linxinpei Dec 14, 2010  Student Writer
Lovely poem -- oddly enough, this is the first time the structure of the poem caught my eye, instead of the imagery.
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:iconmjulinir:
Thank you! I've always liked playing around with form and line breaks. It makes writing a lot more fun for me :D
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:icondimerization:
Love the last two lines.
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